Let me know if any other changes are needed. Thanks for the thorough review and the previous copyedits! There's always something to learn from you every time we encounter. Done Changed to infobox b/c I couldn't find the logo description one the last one.("Valor por Tamaulipas logo" or some such) - Khazar2 ( talk) 17:57, 10 October 2013 (UTC) Reply The image of the logo needs a caption."(Organized crime's alleged response page)" It would be better to say "Response page, allegedly by organized crime"."the admin decided to keep the page" - did he decide to leave the page up, or to keep maintaining it?.Done Simplified by removing it entirely."it reported executions, risk situations, armed drug traffickers in the streets, and other drug-related activities that are commonplace in Tamaulipas's criminal underworld" - this seems a little redundant.Done Proceso source says that the video was allegedly uploaded by organized crime (source: En el video, subido presuntamente por el crimen organizado) This may have been a slight synthesis on my part.(presumably an organized crime assassin) - can this simply be cut? I'm not sure it's explicitly supported by that source. #Valor por tamaulipas free#Feel free to revert if you disagree, though. I've taken out the word "users" since that doesn't seem quite right for this format.After re-reading the source I found out that that statement was posted on the FB page. Done My mistake, I thought that Proceso had sent a set of questions to VxT like other media outlets did.Did he e-mail a media outlet to tell them? Which source are you looking at for that part? "Through an e-mail response, " - I'm not quite sure what this means.Done and noted for next time! ComputerJA ( ☎.Second, "since its creation" seems a little awkward and unnecessary I wonder if it can simply be cut. First, it would be better to say "stated" than alleged, per WP:WTW. "It alleged since its creation that the information spread by Valor por Tamaulipas" - two points here.Should I add this information by attributing it to him? ComputerJA ( ☎ In the third question the admin says that he considered the creation of Anti-Valor por Tamaulipas the "first credible" threat by organized crime. In the Spanish source, El Universal sent a set of questions to the admin. It's more of a "competition/direct challenge" against the page than a threat. The creation of the page doesn't necessarily count as a threat. "The first threat that the admin of Valor por Tamaulipas received was when" - is this really a "threat" compared to what came later? Might just say flatly that this rival page was created without comment.Done Facepalm Not sure how I missed that but I added a source from CPJ that attributes the attack to Los Zetas."journalist and blogger María Elizabeth Macías Castro was decapitated by Los Zetas" - though the infererence can obviously be made, the source doesn't appear to explicitly attribute this to Los Zetas could we simply say she was decapitated?."Since 2004, however, Tamaulipas has been a major battleground for rival drug trafficking organizations that fight for the control of the state's smuggling routes." -this seems redundant with the paragraph's first two sentences-could this sentence simply be cut?.
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